Corrections

Questions have been highlighted with comments in the footnotes. Page 1: (My life started... At the moment I began to share it with her. The beginning of our story together.) (I want to be with her forever. I love her. I love her desperately.) (I cannot keep this feeling under control. This feeling… That rules my whole world… And drags me to her.) :::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Page 2:: (This feeling is so big that it can’t fit in my heart.) (The reason why my skin burns… There where she touches me.) (Haru-chan…) -? -The phone is ringing. Who could be calling this late at night? ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Page 3:: -Hello? -Kotomi? -M-mom? -I’m sorry for calling so suddenly. Did I wake you up? I didn’t know what time it was there. -Don’t worry. It’s not too late. -How are you doing? Are you eating properly? What about the school? Are you studying? And your grades? -Uhm… everything is okay. You don’t have to worry about anything. All right. I know you’re so responsible, but even so… It’s not right that we leave you there alone for so long. -Huh? ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Page 4:: -You see, your father and I have been talking about it lately, and we think it will be the best. -? What’s going on, mom? -We made a good business here, so… (It can’t be…! I was naive for really thinking we could stay together like this forever.) :::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Page 5:: -But that’s impossible… Everything in life coming to an end. (Part A: Unheard feelings) ::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::::: Page 1 (Yellow): added “This feeling…” because some readers might not know what is being referred to. Page 2 (Yellow): it was a little hard understanding what the sentence meant, but I think I got it. Let me know if it’s not what is being conveyed. Page 2 (Green): I’m not sure as to what’s being said here. Could you maybe explain. My idea is that its saying “The reason I feel warm… in the place that she touches me…” Page 3 (Yellow): again not sure about the first part of the sentence, “It’s not right that we…” I think whats being said is “It’s not like we…” Page 5 (Yellow): This one I have no idea so I reworded it as that. Final comments: for being a first draft, the grammar was pretty clean and flowing.